Wednesday, March 18, 2009

Sticky Post: Story Post: [Act 2] Aftermath

After opening credits roll: Unidentified character is watching a news report about the plane incident.

Target Body Count: 60

Comments

Qwazukee:

03-18-2009 20:37:18 UTC

Title: Quake
Script: Television begins to rattle, then falls and smashes. Ceiling caves in, worker on roof splats to the ground next to unidentified character. Camera pans out, showing said character’s eyes rolling back into head as she dies of fright. Building begins to collapse disastrously.
Body Count: 2

Influenza:

03-18-2009 21:09:11 UTC

Title: Night out.

Script: Buildings nearby begin to collapse also. People run from their homes in fright. Walls tumble from the sheer force. Six friends stroll home after a night in the pub, a quaking giant oak tree topples, one survives, a tall girl with long dark hair, she screams.

Body Count: 5

Total Body Count: 7

(since qwaz’ body count was equal to total at that point, I don’t think that matters?)

Klisz:

03-18-2009 21:30:28 UTC

Title: Reintroduction of hero.

Script: Hero walks out of crashed plane. Out of other side of plane, man from flashback comes out. Hero and man duel and hero eventually kills man.

Body Count: 1

Total Body Count: 8

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:31:59 UTC

Title: Quake Machine

Script: Giant machine emerges from underground, killing one bystander.  The man from the prologue is on the machine.  Man announces evil plot to cause natural disasters with the machine.  Tall girl interferes by throwing tree at man, misses, gets shot.

Body Count: 2

Total Body Count: 9

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:32:23 UTC

Posted at same time as Darth.

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:32:37 UTC

Rolled before Darth, though.

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:35:20 UTC

So, what do we do now?

Klisz:

03-18-2009 21:37:28 UTC

Quote by Rodlen on a General’s Order post:

“HAH! I was first!”

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:39:11 UTC

Oh wait…CONTINUITY!  against

Reintroduction of hero needs to be removed, as the hero was never on the plane.

Kevan:

03-18-2009 21:41:11 UTC

Creating a scene involves “rolling DICE5 [...] then posting a comment”, so you haven’t created the scene until you’ve posted the comment. So Darth’s was created earlier.

I guess the lesson here is to reload the comments page right before posting your own. But maybe we could use a rule for being able to retract your own scenes.

Kevan:

03-18-2009 21:44:01 UTC

... and that was a simulpost, made before I’d read the continuity call.

Maybe it’s a different plane? Act 1 was all flashback, wasn’t it?

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:45:22 UTC

Darth’s scene contradicts Act 1 anyway, though.

And the retraction rule would have to force the Scripter who retracts to use the same body count the next time he does something in the act…

Rodlen:

03-18-2009 21:46:47 UTC

DAGH. Same time as Kevan.

Devenger:

03-18-2009 22:06:01 UTC

I’m agreeing with Rodlen’s dispute, on the ground the hero is in the wrong place (by my interpretation). Plus, I prefer the earthquake machine plot to going back to the plane immediately. Also, is Man that easy to kill? I think not. Continuity failure.

- the unfair Producer

Gnauga:

03-18-2009 22:08:13 UTC

OUCHBURNED

Darknight:

03-18-2009 22:51:52 UTC

Title: Love Hurts

Script: Man pushes yellow button causing machine to fire lightning from the sky. Lightning hits a nearby pool, frying two lovers during a tender moment.

Body Count: 2

Total body count: 10 (as darths scene was cut)

allispaul:

03-18-2009 23:12:58 UTC

Title: The Approach

Script: Machine sprouts treads and begins to roll towards nearby city.  It rises over the horizon as a family of four in the foreground madly drives away.  Man fires a rocket, causing their car to flip and explode.  Close-up on man with a hint of a smile on his face.

Body Count: 4

Total body count: 14

Kevan:

03-18-2009 23:35:27 UTC

Title: The Farmhouse

Script: Cut to a dark farmhouse. An owl hoots. A light comes on in an upstairs window. Cut to front verandah, where a farmer is loading a shotgun and squinting out into the night. The ground begins to shake. With a roar, the machine flattens the farmhouse, killing its four occupants.

Body Count: 4

Total body count: 19 (if Darth’s scene was cut, the total just carries on from Rodlen’s)

Gnauga:

03-19-2009 00:59:16 UTC

Title: Future Sidekick

Script: Seven lost Boy Scouts emerge from woods. Machine attacks. Hero appears with shovel, deflects projectile, saves spikey-haired boy. Boy charges machine, Hero restrains boy.

Body Count: 6 (Rolled five + 1 for popularity)

Total body count: 25

Jeid:

03-19-2009 02:02:47 UTC

Title: Tactical Retreat

Script: Hidden amidst some foliage the Hero introduces himself as Stewart to his newfound sidekick whom he calls Oliver even though that is not the boy’s name. Stewart fires a flare to signal the awaiting attack helicopters which force the machine back underground suffering one lost chopper and it’s four occupants.

Body Count: 4

Total Body Count: 29

SingularByte:

03-19-2009 08:33:52 UTC

19/03 00:37 (UTC) - Gnauga
  Comment:
(HA HA I’M USING DICE:5)

This isn’t using DICE5. I think Gnauga’s scene is invalid.

SingularByte:

03-19-2009 08:51:51 UTC

Oliver hears noises in nearby foliage but before Hero is informed, ten goons jump out. Oliver pushes hero over and gets hit with bullets. Hero gets angry at the loss of new friend. He flying kicks one goon, picks up gun and shoots three before hearing faint “Help!” from Oliver.

Body count: 4 (Rolled 5, deducted 1)

Total Body Count: 27 if Gnauga’s is invalid.

SingularByte:

03-19-2009 08:53:06 UTC

Forgot the title so I’m reposting (as the previous one isn’t valid)

Title: Getting even

Oliver hears noises in nearby foliage but before Hero is informed, ten goons jump out. Oliver pushes hero over and gets hit with bullets. Hero gets angry at the loss of new friend. He flying kicks one goon, picks up gun and shoots three before hearing faint “Help!” from Oliver.

Body count: 4 (Rolled 5, deducted 1)

Total Body Count: 27 if Gnauga’s is invalid.

Gnauga:

03-19-2009 10:24:05 UTC

Quoth rule popularity: “Scripters must add their Popularity (regardless of whether or not it is negative) to their roll for number of Bodies in a Scene.”

I rolled a DICE:5 then added one for popularity.

SingularByte:

03-19-2009 10:38:29 UTC

My point is you rolled DICE, not DICE5.

ais523:

03-19-2009 11:40:38 UTC

Err… isn’t everything since Rodlen’s call of continuity illegal? Because the act can only be removed from development hell by Devenger? Or is the call of continuity invalid because Rodlen wrote “Oh wait…” before the call?

ais523:

03-19-2009 11:41:29 UTC

Sorry about that, ignore me, I missed Devenger’s comment.

Qwazukee:

03-19-2009 15:10:18 UTC

Ok, I tested to see what happened with Gnauga. The only way he could have got that is to type the exact letters: “HA HA I’M USING DICE:5”

Obviously, it then sorta looked like he had actually rolled a 5, until SB caught it. Gnauga’s scene is invalid. Gnauga, to roll a DICE5 you need to type “DICE5” rather than “DICE:5”

Also, for some reason the GNDT put a black highlight on everything I did that was a legitimate roll. Which is actually pretty cool/useful, now that I think about it. Who programmed that?

Qwazukee:

03-19-2009 15:13:53 UTC

Gnauga rolled properly the last act, fyi.

Kevan:

03-19-2009 15:36:06 UTC

I added the black highlight a couple of hours ago. It seems an innocent enough typo on Gnauga’s part.

Josh:

03-19-2009 15:54:35 UTC

Title: Establishing motivation

With his dying breath, Oliver tells the Hero about a shadowy government conspiracy he heard about from his scoutmaster. Oliver is shot by a government sniper in a helicopter, which the Hero destroys by throwing a brick at it, killing both occupants.

Body count: 3

Total body count: 30

Rodlen:

03-19-2009 17:31:03 UTC

Brick fu!

Devenger:

03-19-2009 19:02:56 UTC

Gosh, we’ve had tree-throwing and brick-throwing… what’s next?

Rodlen:

03-19-2009 19:17:00 UTC

How is Tall Girl involved in the government conspiracy?

Who is Man?

Jeid:

03-19-2009 19:53:43 UTC

nobody liked Stweart for the ‘heroes’ name?

allispaul:

03-19-2009 20:18:24 UTC

Stweart is a wimpy name.  I prefer Stewart.

Psychotipath:

03-19-2009 22:57:00 UTC

the copter then procedes to crash on the blockade anihillating the 4 soldiers standing thereupon

body count 4
total 34

Qwazukee:

03-19-2009 23:40:27 UTC

Doesn’t count, didn’t have a title.

Gnauga:

03-20-2009 00:47:05 UTC

OSH- I broke the system.

Qwazukee:

03-20-2009 00:59:28 UTC

?What system?

arthexis:

03-20-2009 06:31:21 UTC

Title: Doom on the Horizon

Script: The Heroe turns to look at the machine at it dances across the horizon. The huge contraption extends a terrible claw at an horrorized crowd that attempts to flee. A filament, seemingly made of pure energy is thrusted forward and impales five people in a row: none survives.

Body Count: 5

Total Body Count: 35

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 07:00:16 UTC

...Someone looks a bit asleep.

arthexis:

03-20-2009 07:02:16 UTC

Why? The machine got back up for more

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 07:02:33 UTC

against CONTINUITY!

Doom on the Horizon depends on the machine being above ground.  The helicopters drove it back underground during Jeid’s scene.

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 07:05:05 UTC

Same time as arth.

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 07:08:31 UTC

Plus, the scene is riddled with typos.

Darknight:

03-20-2009 07:51:11 UTC

Wow, Arts and Rodlens posts seem out of order. But I’m with Rodlen, most movies show when the BBEG pops back up, its never an off screen moment

arthexis:

03-20-2009 08:08:10 UTC

I am the experimental type of filmmaker.

Darknight:

03-20-2009 08:16:27 UTC

Ummmm…. if rodlen gets snubbed his scene gets cut and promply f’s up 6 other scenes

Kevan:

03-20-2009 10:08:21 UTC

It only f’s them up in the sense that we can call continuity on them (although a little shakily, as the sudden appearance of a Machine is more non-sequitur than contradiction); I wouldn’t guarantee that the Producer would back them up.

Would be good to fix that rule, though. Maybe the snubbed Scene stays, but the Producer (or the accused Scripter) gets to rewrite it.

arthexis:

03-20-2009 15:59:46 UTC

Or maybe the snubbed scene stays, but the Scripter gets no bodies from it.

Klisz:

03-20-2009 16:12:36 UTC

against CONTINUITY!

“If any Scripter feels that one or more Scenes in a non-Finished Act contradict a Scene in a Finished Act, or contradict an earlier Scene in the same Act”

It doesn’t say I’m not allowed to scream about cut scenes, so:
Rod’s scene contradicts mine. The man is on the robot, but earlier the man had just got off the plane.

Kevan:

03-20-2009 16:14:10 UTC

You can’t call continuity while we’re still in Development Hell. Devenger has to resolve the current continuity issue first.

Klisz:

03-20-2009 16:16:47 UTC

“Wow, Arts and Rodlens posts seem out of order. But I’m with Rodlen, most movies show when the BBEG pops back up, its never an off screen moment”

I thought that was Dev resolving the issue.

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 16:21:46 UTC

That was Darknight.

Devenger:

03-20-2009 19:33:09 UTC

The Producer is somewhat frustrated that people can’t recognise him from his giant glasses, protruding nose and incredibly large pointy hat. Nonetheless, my hands are tied. I feel I should disagree with Rodlen’s call, because arth’s Scene starts with the Hero refocusing his attention on the machine, which suggests that there was sufficient distraction for him to have not noticed up until this point (making the unknowingness of viewers merely an act of sharing in the hero’s shock and annoyance). However, I am taking no decision - the Act will remain in Development Hell until the proposal is passed to prevent Rodlen’s rejection from breaking more continuity.

Rodlen, please be less trigger-happy with the continuity claims. Producers do horrible things to Scripters who slow down production.

- <8^( : The Producer, Devenger

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 19:47:48 UTC

However, the machine had just been brought back underground a few short scenes ago.  Maybe a minute had passed, at most.

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 19:55:29 UTC

To be exact, two scenes, one of which was a rather short fight scene and the other being a short dying breath speech followed by a brick.

It would probably take more time than that for the machine, which had to be close enough for the nearby helicopters to drive underground (wait, the machine is in the horizon!?!), to go all the way to the horizon and out of the ground.  The helicopters were close enough for the hero to throw a brick at one and hit.  Plus, who is the “heroe”?

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 19:56:06 UTC

And “an” horrorized croud!?1

Qwazukee:

03-20-2009 19:59:48 UTC

Some people use “an” before H words. As in, “It’s an honor to meet you, sir.”

Qwazukee:

03-20-2009 20:00:17 UTC

It’s just more sensible in front of some H words than others.

Rodlen:

03-20-2009 20:03:41 UTC

But still, who is the “heroe”?

Devenger:

03-20-2009 20:53:05 UTC

Note: The theme of this dynasty is not pedantry.

Psychotipath:

03-21-2009 10:41:57 UTC

I think he is right about the continuity here, unless the machine is very fast, is it?


that puts us back to:

Title: crash and burn

scene: The helicopter then procedes to crash on the blockade, incinerating the 3 soldiers standing thereupon.

body count 3
total 33

Is this the right format for a scene?

Igthorn:

03-21-2009 13:02:35 UTC

We’re still in development hell, right?

Devenger:

03-21-2009 13:26:46 UTC

Yep, we’re still in development hell. Psycho’s scene doesn’t count, again.

Psychotipath:

03-21-2009 18:52:45 UTC

ok sorry, again i’ll work out how all this works eventually, it is ever so slightly confusing.

Influenza:

03-22-2009 09:30:08 UTC

this machine creates earthquakes, there’s nothing to say it can’t be very fast ;P and who’s to say it hasn’t already created a tunnel network beneath the ground? maybe it’s just an hallucination anyway. ;D

Influenza:

03-22-2009 09:31:41 UTC

Also, my capital letter ran away!

Devenger:

03-22-2009 12:04:43 UTC

I disagree with Rodlen’s continuity claim. Rodlen loses the Bodies they gained from their scene.

We’re out of Development Hell, people!

Psychotipath:

03-22-2009 12:32:42 UTC

yay the helicopter can finally crash

Title: Crash and burn

Script: The helicopter then procedes to crash on the blockade, incinerating the 2 soldiers standing thereupon. In the distance the machine crushes another innocent civilian

body count 3
total 33

Devenger:

03-22-2009 22:37:42 UTC

Title: Swift Unconsciousness

Script: An unseen object hits Hero in back of head. As he drifts into unconsciousness, an unidentified voice (Cathryn Damon) says something deep and meaningful.

Body Count: 0
Total Body Count: 33

(This scene is automatically cut because the actress in question is dead: http://www.imdb.com/name/nm0198919/)

ais523:

03-23-2009 20:38:21 UTC

Title: Shadows

Script: A group of unknown shadowy characters are watching the machine on TV. There are some mumbled orders and a muffled argument; five of them storm out, but are shot in the back by the others on the way.

Body Count: 5
Total Body Count: 38

Devenger:

03-23-2009 22:07:49 UTC

That’s enough. My sanity levels don’t warrant me successfully transferring this onto a wiki page though, and there’s nothing saying I have to do it. Hmmm.

Qwazukee:

03-25-2009 07:37:46 UTC

The wiki page for this is wrong. It should not include cut scenes or invalid scenes.

Kevan:

03-25-2009 10:16:18 UTC

I thought I’d got all the cut and invalid scenes, but feel free to correct any I missed.

Qwazukee:

03-25-2009 21:51:12 UTC

Unrelated: Jupiter should go idle.

Qwazukee:

03-25-2009 22:07:13 UTC

The problems:

Gnauga’s “Future Sidekick” should not be included.

arthexis’ “Doom on the Horizon” should be included.

The final Total Body Count should be 43; for some reason, the bodies from “Doom on the Horizon” were not counted.